Screenplay Title:
Don't Believe the Hype
Number of pages in the screenplay:
| 91 |
1. GENRE: choose up to THREE that apply.
| Action | Comedy |
| Drama | Horror |
| Romance | Sci-Fi |
2. SUB-GENRE: choose up to FIVE that apply.
| Action Adventure | Action Thriller |
| Animal | Biographical |
| Black Comedy | Blaxploitation |
| Buddy Film | Caper |
| Children's | Combat |
| Coming of Age | Crime |
| Cyber-Thriller | Dark Comedy |
| Dark Drama | Detective Story |
| Disaster | Docudrama |
| Epic | Erotic |
| Espionage | Ethnic |
| Fairy Tale | Family Film |
| Fantasy | Female Buddy |
| Film Noir | Gangs |
| Hong Kong Action | Horror |
| International | Law |
| Male Buddy | Martial Arts |
| Medical | Melodrama |
| Memoir | Military |
| Mockumentary | Monster |
| Murder | Murder Mystery |
| Musical | Mystery |
| Mythology | Non-Fiction |
| Occult | Period Adventure |
| Political | Political Satire |
| Psychological | Pulp |
| Road Movie | Romantic Comedy |
| Romantic Drama | Romantic Thriller |
| Satire | Screwball Comedy |
| Serial Killer | Slacker |
| Spoof | Sports |
| Sports Comedy | Sports Drama |
| Spy | Student |
| Superhero | Supernatural |
| Suspense | Teen Thriller |
| Thriller | Time Travel |
| Urban Comedy | Urban Drama |
| War | Western |
3c. Please rate the screenplay's DRAMA on the following scale.
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(15%) |
4. SETTINGS: Please type in the screenplay's setting(s). Maximum of
FIVE.
| Josh's car |
| Parking lot of high school |
| class Room |
| Limo |
| Cedar Falls, Iowa |
5. NUMBER OF LOCATIONS: Please count the number of locations where the
screenplay takes place and select the number range here. Locations which appear more than
once should be treated as one location.
| 8-15 |
6. CIRCA: Please select the screenplay's time period(s). If the
screenplay takes place in more than one time period, hold down "control" or
"shift" on your keyboard and click on all that apply.
| Modern Day |
7. TOTAL NUMBER OF ROLES: Please count the TOTAL NUMBER of actual roles
in the screenplay and list that number here (including lead, supporting and
"bit" characters). A single character whose change in appearance is so drastic
that it would require two or more actors -- for example, a character who appears as both a
small child and as an adult -- should be treated as separate roles.
| 16-24 |
8. NUMBER OF LEAD & SUPPORTING CHARACTERS: Please only count the
number of LEAD and SUPPORTING characters and enter the total number here. Maximum of 25.
| 5 |
9. LEAD & SUPPORTING CHARACTER DESCRIPTIONS: Based on the number of
characters from question 8, please list each lead & supporting character's NAME,
GENDER, AGE and one-line BRIEF DESCRIPTION.
| Character | 1 |
| Name | Josh Murphy |
| Gender | Male |
| Age | Teenager |
| Description | Lead character, black, high school student. |
| Character | 2 |
| Name | Calvin |
| Gender | Male |
| Age | Teenager |
| Description | AKA Cracker, white kid who loves rap music. |
| Character | 3 |
| Name | Ryan Ealy |
| Gender | Male |
| Age | Teenager |
| Description | High school kid who thinks about nothing but sex. |
| Character | 4 |
| Name | Robert |
| Gender | Male |
| Age | Teenager |
| Description | High school kid who thinks of everyday as Halloween. He likes to pretend he's some one new everyday. |
| Character | 5 |
| Name | Tom Shook |
| Gender | Male |
| Age | Teenager |
| Description | AKA Shooks, the token fat kid. |
10. LOG LINE: Please use the space below to synopsize the screenplay's
story. 1-3 short sentences.
| The storyline follows Josh as he beats up an old friend and celebrity and then is hailed as a hero and has to deal with the aftermath of that incident. |
11. BRIEF SYNOPSIS: Please use the space below to write a concise
synopsis of the screenplay's story and plot. 1-3 short paragraphs.
| Josh meets up with a kid he once knew through choir, who has now become famous. Josh decides to beat the living daylights out of him. Instead of getting Josh in trouble, this act gets him recognized as a hero. He hates that light, so he puts up a nasty porn site, filled with everything, including kiddie porn with the Olsen twins. Somehow this gets his known as an artist. Josh then tries to kill an old man and this gets construed as a good thing. And once again, he tries to run over a man in the street and actually helps the police in this act. In the end, he decides to be good and this gets him into trouble when he tries to help an old lady. |
12. BRIEF COMMENTS: Please use the space below to write a few brief
criticisms or compliments relating to the screenplay's story, characters and writing.
Please use examples from the screenplay to illustrate your comments.
| The content was awful. I was truly offended by the language and the actions played out by the characters. It was far too violent and offensive. For example, the reference to the kiddie porn Josh created with the Olsen twins was too over the top. Josh's rampage with Preston was uncalled for. There was no explanation for the complete rage Josh felt for Preston or any of the other characters. |
13. SIMILAR FILMS: Please enter up to THREE movies that this screenplay
most reminded you of, in terms of story, characters, genre, etc.
| Very bad things |
14. TRUE OR FALSE: Please indicate whether each of the FIVE following
statements is true or false. You must get at least THREE questions correct.
| Question | Response |
| The story takes place in the state of Iowa. | True |
| In the screenplay, Calvin loves hip hop music. His nickname is honkey boy. | False |
| Josh enjoys the newfound fame and publicity that finds him. | False |
| The celebrity, Preston James, that Josh saves is a famous magician. | False |
| In the conclusion of the story, Josh is loved by all and a parade is thrown in his honor which conludes the story. | False |
15. HOW WOULD YOU RATE THIS SCREENPLAY OVERALL?
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(15%) |
16. PLEASE RATE THE CONCEPT/IDEA OF THE SCREENPLAY.
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(15%) |
17. PLEASE RATE THE PLOT/STORY OF THE SCREENPLAY.
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(10%) |
18. WERE YOU ABLE TO FOLLOW THE STORY?
| Yes, I was able to follow it |
19. WAS THE STORY WELL STRUCTURED?
| No |
20. DID IT BUILD WELL TO THE CONCLUSION?
| No |
21. DID YOU FEEL SATISFIED BY THE ENDING?
| No |
22. PLEASE RATE THE QUALITY OF THE CHARACTERS OVERALL.
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(15%) |
23. DESCRIBE THE CHARACTERS OVERALL. (check one in each row)
| Well developed | Under-developed |
| Realistic | Unrealistic |
| Just enough characters | Too many/Not enough |
| I was interested in them | I was not interested in them |
24. HOW WOULD YOU RATE THE LEAD MALE CHARACTER(S)?
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(20%) |
25. DESCRIBE THE LEAD MALE CHARACTER(S).
(check one in each row)
| Well developed | Under-developed |
| Realistic | Unrealistic |
| I was interested in him/them | I was not interested in him/them |
26. HOW WOULD YOU RATE THE LEAD FEMALE CHARACTER(S)?
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(10%) |
27. DESCRIBE THE LEAD FEMALE CHARACTER(S).(check one in each row)
| Well developed | Under-developed |
| Realistic | Unrealistic |
| I was interested in her/them | I was not interested in her/them |
28. HOW WOULD YOU RATE THE SUPPORTING CHARACTER(S)?
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(20%) |
29. DESCRIBE THE SUPPORTING CHARACTER(S).(check one in each row)
| Well Developed | Under-developed |
| Realistic | Unrealistic |
| Just Enough | Too many/Not enough |
| I was interested in them | I was not interested in them |
30. WAS THE CHARACTERS' BEHAVIOR CONSISTENT WITH THEIR PERSONALITIES?
| No |
31. WAS EACH CHARACTER DISTINCT AND WELL DIFFERENTIATED FROM THE OTHER
CHARACTERS?
| No |
32. PLEASE RATE THE QUALITY OF THE DIALOGUE OVERALL.
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(10%) |
33. DESCRIBE THE DIALOGUE OVERALL.
| Well Developed | Under-developed |
| Realistic | Unrealistic |
| Just enough | Too much/Not enough |
34. PLEASE RATE THE LEAD MALE CHARACTER(S)' DIALOGUE.
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(10%) |
35. PLEASE RATE THE LEAD FEMALE CHARACTER(S)' DIALOGUE.
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(10%) |
36. PLEASE RATE THE SUPPORTING CHARACTER(S)' DIALOGUE.
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(10%) |
37. PLEASE RATE THE SCREENPLAY'S ORIGINALITY.
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(15%) |
38. PLEASE RATE THE PACING OVERALL.
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(15%) |
39. PLEASE RATE THE SETTINGS OVERALL.
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(20%) |
40. PLEASE RATE THE BEGINNING/OPENING OF THE SCREENPLAY.
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(20%) |
41. PLEASE RATE THE MIDDLE OF THE SCREENPLAY.
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(15%) |
42. PLEASE RATE THE CLIMAX OF THE SCREENPLAY.
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(15%) |
43. PLEASE RATE THE LENGTH OF THE SCREENPLAY.
| Too short |
44. DESCRIBE THIS SCRIPT USING THESE WORDS.
(choose up to TEN that apply)
| Offensive; Too much violence; Not My Taste; Unrealistic |
45. USING YOUR BEST GUESS,WHAT BUDGET RANGE DO YOU THINK THIS MOVIE MIGHT
FIT IN?
| Low budget |
46. IF THIS SCREENPLAY WERE MADE INTO A MOVIE, WHICH (IF ANY) OF THE
FOLLOWING ELEMENTS WOULD PLAY A CENTRAL ROLE IN THE STORY?
(please check all that apply)
| Natural Disaster | Explosions |
| Large Fire | Make-Up F/X |
| Storm | Underwater Filming |
| "Otherworldly" Scenes | Filming on Water |
| Period/Exotic Costumes | Rain |
| Car Chase | Visual F/X |
| Snow | Numerous sets |
| Battle sequences | Stunts |
| Crowds | None of the above |
47. IF THIS SCREENPLAY WERE MADE INTO A MOVIE, WOULD YOU PAY TO GO SEE IT?
| No, I would not pay money to see it |
48. According to the MPAA guidlines, what rating do you think this movie
would receive?
| R |
49. Please indicate your overall recommendation: Traditional Hollywood
Studio coverage concludes with a reader's recommendation to the studio as to how to
proceed with the project. What is your recommendation to greenlight?
| Pass |
50. Did you think that this screenplay was "too much" like a
specific movie/story you've seen/read before?
| No |
If yes, it was just like
51. Would you say that this screenplay generally met with proper
"industry standard" format requirements?
| No |
Finally, please type in any additional comments, notes of praise, or further critique
for the author here.
| If the spacing, character size and margins were set correctly, I do not think this screenplay would have been 90 pages or over. I feel strongly that the author added spaces and jacked the margins to fall within the contest guidelines. |